The Sandman
Over young and old
the Sandman
sprinkles nightly dust
I’m Not Tired
weary children wail
“But I’m not tired” as
they fall asleep
Copyright © 2018 Abigail Gronway – All Rights Reserved
Written for #OctPoWriMo
I have been writing my tercets but forgetting to post them. This weekend I did not forget.
Here are two different forms presented together with a unity of theme, so that they could easily be read together as a single poem. “The Sandman” is a Kelly’s Lune, and “I’m Not Tired” is a Collom’s Lune.
Scansion:
Kelly’s Lune
known as the American Haiku, invented by Robert Kelly
syllabic: 5-3-5 syllables per line
any topic, meter, rhyme, metaphor allowed
Collom’s Lune
invented by Jack Collom
lexical: 3-5-3 words per line
any topic, meter, rhyme, metaphor allowed
Dark Side of the Moon 
Love them! I like the Lune form… simple, concise and with the right word choice… powerful.
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I had not heard of them before now, but I like them too. I agree with you that a short poem forces you, more so than a long one, to choose your words carefully, because each one is a greater part of the whole.
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Inspired by yours, I wrote a lune today:
https://poemsforwarriors.wordpress.com/2018/10/27/bustle-lune/
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Oh good! I love it when one poem begets another.
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I like lunes, too!
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After reading these comments, I feel like the new kid on the block, since I am just learning about lunes. 🙂 But I think they shall become one of my favorite short forms. Thank you for your comment, Jenna.
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