Stones That Line the Path

Stones that line the path,
though they bruise and cut my feet,
keep me from the mire,
strengthen me with every step,
hasten me to journey’s end.

Wa = Japanese
Ka = poem

Waka consists of three units, with the syllabic pattern of  5-7-5-7-7.

The first two lines (5-7) treat one subject.
The second two lines (5-7) treat another subject.
The last line (7) is a refrain or paraphrase.

The first two lines are a dependent clause, while the last three are independent.

This was my attempt at a Waka, although I am not entirely sure I got it right. I have not seen any examples of this form, nor do I know how to treat two separate subjects in a compound sentence; but I did at least create a shift in perspective from the dependent portion to the independent portion.

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